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PostSubject: Advice on my prolouge maybe?   Advice on my prolouge maybe? Icon_minitime5/16/2014, 8:58 pm

Imagine a world of peace and intelligence. Seventh graders have the IQ of todays twelfth graders. There are next to no crimes, no jails, no anything. Great, right? Well, now imagine the opposite side of the train tracks. There are robberies daily, jails filled to the brim in every small town and maybe even more than one in bigger cities. Sorry to say, it's real. All that separates these two worlds? An abandoned train track that no one ever crosses. This is the story of a rebellious girl and a kind hearted girl who meet and switch world and fight to bring back the balance.


I know, I know, it's short and it's stupid, but if i coud have any advice that's be great!
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PostSubject: Re: Advice on my prolouge maybe?   Advice on my prolouge maybe? Icon_minitime5/21/2014, 7:33 pm

i think the prologue sounds more like a summary, but it could be a really awesome idea. like, the whole "wrong side of the tracks" expression, but in real life and all that. prologues are written like the story would be written, so, unless you plan to write the rest of the story like this, keep this as a summary. but as far as plots go, this one sounds pretty awesome

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