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Name: Violette Krystall
Age: 13
Gender: Girl
Eyes: Pink
Hair: blond and moderately long, she likes to decorate it with gemstones
Height: 5'4"
Body Type: So skinny she could be anorexic. (in otherwords, a supermodel)
Skin Color: Glowing, flawless
God Parent: Aphrodiete
Mortal Parent: Her father who looks like a male version of herself except she looks more like Aphrodiete
Country of Origin: Zimbabwe
Pets: A dragon that's very nice to her and vicious to her enemies and has a special connection with Violette. The dragon's name is Arisondia
Talents: Whale milking, music, math, science. i
Weapon**: Her looks which can not strike people down like a million daggers if she's angry and also change hearts for the better
Flaws:Being too perfect, She trips a lot, And constantly has the hiccups, being 4 inches tall
Powers(must relate to god parent; optional): And also the hair thing, up to 15 feet.
Life Before CHB*: She was a total super model, and her family TEMPORARILY moved to Antartica. She found her way to Camp Half Blood after winning an all-expense-paid trip to New York after winning a school contest. She joined service committees at her school and was always doing good to others. Her favorite food was french toast.
RP Example*: “Hmm,” Scowler said to me

“Scowlere?” I asked.

“ IT'S SCOWLER, NOT SCOWLERE!!!EVERYONE MESSES UP MY NAME!" He sobbed.

“Skowlokeproppledee?”Toofoo quizzed. Then Scowler ran away, flinging his hideous tail at Toofoo in disgust.Toofoo, eager to make fun of Scowler's name, chased after. Scowler then felloff a cliff. Hardly. Very hardly. When Toofoo,coughing and sputtering, watched Scowler fall, Toofoo jumped after, yellingthings like, "Scowlette? Blah? Scowlene?"

They landed in a pit. "Scones?Squid?" Toofoo questioned. Not really a PIT, just deep. A big pit, to bespecific. Scowler ran and disappeared into a cave. "Wait Scones!" Toofoocalled, then scrambled after Scowler.

Scowler turned around with venom inhis eyes. "SIC HER, GIANT LIONS!!!" He wailed. Then he collapsed. Toofoocrept backwards, very slowly, hands pathetically raised to try and defend fromgiant lions. Scowler writhed on the floor, then died. Along with his sword. Hissword died. As well as Scowler. Toofoo watched as Scowler convulsed andcollapsed with his sword. Scowler then stabbed himself with the sword, killinghimself further. Then he floated away, whispering, "Eat the GRAPES."

Toofoo then invented a time machineand went back and stole his gleaming sword. A pile of grapes appeared in themachine. "What?" Toofoo gasped as grapes flooded her preciousmachine. Then the lions ate the machine, but the grapes were still there. "NOOO!"Wailed Toofoo, as all Toofoo's hard work was wasted.

Toofoo raised Scowler's sword highabove her head and prepared to fight the giant lions. She did breathingexercises. She did yoga. Then Toofoo wielded the sword in anger. Then thelions…

Ran in circles frenzied. The giantlions snarled and snapped at terrified Toofoo. They seemed confused as they staredat the grapes, then back to Toofoo. Toofoo decided to take this chance at notgetting killed to grab Scowler and get out. The lions tried to chase after her,but the cave entrance was too small.

"HA!" Toofoo shouted triumphantly,still dashing down the cave with an uncooperative Scowler. Suddenly, the cavefloor collapsed.

"Scooter? Squaintle?"Toofoo badgered. "YEEK!" Toofoo shouted.

Toofoo and Scowler tumbled down the seemingly endlesstunnel, until they finally came to a grassy area.

Scowler woke up. "SQUID'S ALIVE!"Shouted an eccentric Toofoo.

"What?" Said Scowler.

"Um, nothing." Toofooeyes wandered away from Scowler as if he was an angry bull that you didn't wantto get attention from. Scowler just shrugged and walked forward. Toofoo hid herface with her long red braids. Toofoo sheepishly followed Scowler.

Then Scowler screamed!

"What?" panicked Toofoo.

"Nothing." He shruggedagain.

Toofoo seemed to be getting calmerand once again pestered, "Soup? Scowenderly?"

He flipped his long black hair ather, disgusted, and huffed off, stomping in his big boots. "I HATE myname." He whined.

Toofoo stumbled along behind him,flip-flops slapping the ground. "Scones? Do you like Scones?"

He chose to ignore her annoyingcomments. "Did you notice it's getting warmer and warmer and warmer...?”He perceived.

It was indeed very warm -- almost 100 degrees. He took off his redjacket. It wasn't much use, since he was still wearing a blue long-sleevedshirt and dark jeans.

"MY theory is that we arenearing something warm." He said smartly.

(Toofoo is kind of driving Scowler off theedge. I think he's sad he didn't die when he jumped off that cliff earlier.)

"MY theory is that it's just ahot day," Toofoo snapped back.

Scowler widened his eyes, but madeno comment, except for that: "It was colder before." (Then his headfell off...)

Toofoo squinted and inquired,"Weather changes during the day."

He threw up his arms. "BUT NOTIN TEN MINUTES!!!"

They were so consumed in theirfight they didn't realize the string stretched out across the ground.

"YES IN TEN MINUTES!" Sheranted.

"NO IN TEN MINUTES!"

Toofoo tripped and fell flat on heryellow shirt. Scowler smirked and stepped over the string.

"What was that string therefor, anyways?" He wondered out loud.

Toofoo indignantly got up andbrushed herself off. "Who cares, stupid?" She remarked.

Suddenly three coconuts rolledover. They smacked Scowler on the leg of his dark jeans. He kicked one awaywith his boot. "Oookay." Toofoo scooped up a coconut and tossed itaround in her hands.

"I like these coconuts,"She smiled. She was replaying the image of Scowler getting smacked by a coconutover and over in her head.

"They gave me a bruise andgave me a smear on my jeans!!!" He protested.

"Exactly my point!" Shelaughed.

He huffed. "YOUR jeans arefine."

"Yeah, they are," Toofooteased.

"Fine, keep the coconuts.They're just a fruit, anyways." He continued walking.

"Hey!" Yelped anunsatisfied coconut, “I’m no fruit!"

"Sorry. Herb." Hecorrected.

"Seed!" the coconutrevised.

"Right." He glanced atToofoo and gave her a questioning look. Didyou know they could talk?

Yes,I'm not an idiot, Toofoo mouthed back.

He screamed and let a flying tackleat Toofoo. "AAAHIEEE!!!" He screeched.

“YAAAH!" Toofoo yelped, tryingto defend herself with a protesting coconut. All of a sudden, (His head felloff.) All of a sudden, the room was bombarded with a blast of heat. 200Degrees. Celsius. Toofoo screeched like a vulture as the heat scorched andblistered her skin. She limped over to a rock to protect herself. Scowler dovedown an icy hole. Toofoo, still hot, raced in after him.

They arrived at a chilly cavern,where a giant bat and clam were deep into conversation.

"I disagree." The batstated.

They were arguing about wheat, andToofoo sided with the clam.

"I agree," Toofoo jumpedin.

The bat and Scowler turned to her. "What?"The bat growled.

"Wheat is SO enough to liveoff of." Scowler said.

"Oh, take the bat'sside," Whined the clam to Scowler.

"No, it's not," SaidToofoo. “Especially considering there's no wheat in this cave!"

"If there WAS, we COULD liveoff of it!" The old bat bickered.

"What about those with noteeth?" The clam complained.

"WELL THEY SHOULD HAVETEETH..." The bat said.

Scowler spoke what was on his mind."If there’s no food in this cave how did you get so big? Don't you needfood to live and such?" He questioned. Scowler always asked questions.That's why everyone found him annoying.

Ignoring the bat, the clam went on,"I get in the water and feed on plankton. No, plankton is not made ofwheat."

The bat stated, "Well I liveoff of the ice on the walls!"

Toofoo piped up from behind theclam, "Clams definitely do not have teeth."

Scowler noticed that the walls werethinning in the immense heat. "Um... guys?" He started.

"What?" Toofoo snarled.

"This place is about tocollapse." He said calmly.

Toofoo yelped and hopped inside theclam's mouth, hoping to be protected by its immense shell.

"Weirdo," Scowlermuttered.

The darkness blanketed Toofoo asshe sloshed around in slime. At least she was safe when she heard a CCCRUNCH! coming from outside the clam.

"It's collapsing," Scowlermuttered. He joined Toofoo... he wasn't dumb.

They heard the wall crack and creakand finally come crashing down. Toofoo wanted to get out and check the damage,but to her alarm, the clam was clamped shut.

"Now what do we do, smarty?"Scowler asked.

"At least we're notdead," Toofoo noted.

"Wow. I feel so joyous." Scowlersaid blankly.

Toofoo bumped Scowler on the arm,or at least what she hoped was his arm.

"What?" He huffed.

"You're so negative,"Said Toofoo.

"Well, I would rather be deadthan this."

Toofoo felt around for Scowler'stail and bit it. It tasted like slime, but it was worth it.

"OW!" He said, rubbinghis precious Lion Tail-- a sign that he had befriended the giant lions.

"You and your stupidtail," Callously commented Toofoo.

Toofoo turned and rolled over onthe squishy surface.

"You and your stupid... uh...Braids!" Huffed Scowler.

Toofoo hoped her braids weren't asoffended as she was. She felt around for them, just to make sure Scowler didn'tlike, cut them off with scissors or something. Good. Two perfect red braids.She imagined their color in the blackness.

"This is all yourfauuulllt." Scowler complained like a baby pickle.

"We wouldn't be in here if youhadn't sent your dumb lions after me," Toofoo recalled.

"You're the one who sided withthe clam."

"Yeah, and now, because of theclam, we're not dead."

"I think the clam ISdead."

"But WE'RE not."

"But we're trapped!!!"Scowler whined.

"NOT DEAD!" Toofoopressed.

"YOU upset the stupidcoconut!!! He didn't want to be used as a shield, you know."

"So? You somehow caused thestupid heat wave. Somehow."

"I didn't cause it!!!"

Toofoo sneered. "Proveit."

"Yeah, prove it," Asqueaky voice chided.

"Who was that?" Scowlerasked.

"Me," The voice called.

"Toofoo, did you bring a dumbcoconut in here?" Scowler huffed.

"No," Whimpered Toofoo.

"Well then." Scowlersaid.

A light flickered on. Scowler andToofoo saw each other, ragged and covered in slime.

"I didn't know that clams atelamps." Scowler said, surprised.

"I brought the lamp,"Snarled the squeaky voice.

"Who ARE you?" Scowlerdemanded. "I don't think the clam sounds like that. He sounded olderbefore." He recalled, "It can't be the clam."

"ME." Something short andgrey emerged from the shadows. It had slightly larger-than-average eyes and noears or nose to speak of. It had a large mouth full of fangs and had skinnylittle arms and legs. "Love me." It whispered.

Toofoo screamed and jumped back,landing with a squelch. The thing wailed viciously and started shedding itsskin. After the skin was shed, it revealed the true pink skin with purple polkadots. "I'm SO happy now!" It squealed.

"Awww! Uh, kinda cute,"Toofoo said. She still couldn't get past the fangs, gleaming at her likeknives. As if reading her mind, its mouth suddenly changed into a simple,straight line with dimples. Its eyes grew eyelashes and it smiled cutely.

"OH MY GOODNESS! You're thecutest thing on EARTH!" Wailed Toofoo.

"We're NOT keeping thatthing," Scowler insisted. "You already wanted to keep the stupidcoconuts."

Toofoo scooped the thing up andgave it a squeeze. "But it's so cute!"

"But I don't even know what itIS. Anyways, there's not enough room for the three of us."

"But it's happy. Look at thatgrin!"

"I don't care! We have to getrid of it. All three of us can't fit in the clam," He protested.

Toofoo wanted to keep it. "Howcan we toss him out when there's no exit? How can we toss him out at all?"

"Well unless IT knows how toget out than you can't keep it." He said stubbornly.

"Do you know how to get out,my cutesy wootsey?" Toofoo gushed. It stared at her, then screamed,"OPEN!" Immediately the clam opened. Scowler slapped his hand to hisforehead.

"We're keeping him,"Toofoo declared.

Any notes about your characters: She is NOT flawless and knows how to use a katana. She knows EVERYONE IN THE FLIPPIN... her house.



Last edited by Defaulty on Sat 24 Dec - 6:25; edited 13 times in total (Reason for editing : It's PERFECT now. And not in the Mary-Sue way)


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 4:46
Ehem.
1. We don't allow you to RP gods/Titans for this matter...
2. EVERY character has flaws.

Edit your form so your character is a demigod and has flaws. We can move from there afterward.

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Ellie/Aceso
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Jacqueline/Hecate
Carter/unclaimed
Lucas/Pyriphlegethon
Antony/Minerva(3rd)
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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 4:48
I'm sorry, but my character won't allow me to edit her.
Good day.


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 4:50
...Please read the rules found here: http://www.camphalfblood.org/t1-rules

If you cannot follow the rules of this site, the rest of the staff and I will have to make you leave this site. "/ We would love to welcome you into our community if you will follow the rules and make an appropriate character.

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Veshtov/Hecate
Marcus/Apollo
Ellie/Aceso
Toph/Geb
Jacqueline/Hecate
Carter/unclaimed
Lucas/Pyriphlegethon
Antony/Minerva(3rd)
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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 4:53
Fine, she's not a titan then. Her flaw is being too perfect.


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 4:54
Edit the form, please. Pick a god parent for her, and a mortal parent.

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Marcus/Apollo
Ellie/Aceso
Toph/Geb
Jacqueline/Hecate
Carter/unclaimed
Lucas/Pyriphlegethon
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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 4:58
Fine. It's edited. Do you think my roleplay example is good? :/


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:01
...She can't have all of the gods as her god parent. She also can't be her own parent.

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Marcus/Apollo
Ellie/Aceso
Toph/Geb
Jacqueline/Hecate
Carter/unclaimed
Lucas/Pyriphlegethon
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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:02
I'm sorry, my character just blinked and made you explode. Good day.


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:04
...That's real mature. "/

If you want to role-play here, at least work with me to get your character approved. "/

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Marcus/Apollo
Ellie/Aceso
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Jacqueline/Hecate
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Lucas/Pyriphlegethon
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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:07
I'm sorry. One question, do you like my RP example?


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:09
Honestly, I didn't take the time to read it. Sorry.

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Ellie/Aceso
Toph/Geb
Jacqueline/Hecate
Carter/unclaimed
Lucas/Pyriphlegethon
Antony/Minerva(3rd)
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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:10
Oh....it's really good! :'(


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:14
Maybe if you stopped being so snotty with me, I would have ended up reading it. "/

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Marcus/Apollo
Ellie/Aceso
Toph/Geb
Jacqueline/Hecate
Carter/unclaimed
Lucas/Pyriphlegethon
Antony/Minerva(3rd)
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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:15
I'm sorry for being snotty. Can you give me lessons in being not-snotty? Please?
(that wasn't sarcasm)


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:18
Yes. Just listen to what I have to say about your form.

1. You need ONE god parent for your character. Greek, Norse, and Egyptian are okay choices.
2. Your character needs at least three flaws.

There will be more.

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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:21
Edited.


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:23
3. Narnia isn't a real place, so she can't be from there. Pick somewhere real, on Earth.
4. Her powers must be related to Aphrodite. She can't be all-powerful.

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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:25
Edited: Country of Origin: Anarctica
Powers(must relate to god parent; optional): milking ostriches, making her infinitely long hair grow longer. They never tire her out and she can use them infinitely


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:28
Those... really aren't acceptable.
No one lives and grows up in antarctica.
Milking an ostrich isn't a power.

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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:30
Edited again:
She is from Zimbabwe


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:32
Good. We're getting somewhere.

Ostriches can't be milked... seriously. The hair thing might be okay, but it has to have limits.

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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:34
Edited. She is a professional whale milker


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:40
...Why would you need to milk a whale? Seriously... And even then it would be a talent, not a power.

100 miles is way too long for hair.

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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:45
You need to milk whales to feed orphaned baby whales. Also, whale milk is tasty
Edited so the hair thing is reasonable


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:56
I also edited the talents so it's not everything


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 5:58
Double-posting helps you none.

1 mile is still way too long.

Her talents are quite ridiculous and unrealistic. 10 Nobel peace prizes? Winning the Olympics at the age of 2? Come on.

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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 6:02
Edited that and some other things.


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 6:05
Her eyes cannot be "gamma ray colored" since Gamma rays are not visible to the naked eye, therefore, not having "color," so to speak.

Her hair cannot be infinitely long, nor laced with gemstones.

She can't be 40ft tall.... seriously.

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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 6:07
Edited once more.


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 6:08
Her hair just can't glow... sorry.

No one is 4 inches tall.

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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 6:10
Dang...it's one of her flaws though. Also edited the hair thing


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 6:12
Again, no human/demigod is 4 inches tall. Try and be a little more realistic...

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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 6:14
Edited again


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 6:16
Supermodels may be super skinny, but they aren't normally "fit and healthy" as you described.

Life before CHB needs to be at least 5 sentences long.
Also, the rp example has nothing to do with your character...

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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 6:17
So you read it? I feel happy!


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 6:20
-_- Okay. Well. I have to go now. Someone else can help you later. Try and look through your form. Make sure everything is as realistic as possible.

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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 6:26
Okay. Edited again.
Now that I made my character less unacceptable, you could use the original thing as how not to make a character.


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Subject: Re: Violette Krystall Sat 24 Dec - 17:12
No dragons.

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