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Jake Grace- Son of Amphitrite

Post by Jake Grace on 12/17/2014, 8:27 pm

Name: Jake Grace
Age: 15
Gender:Male
Eyes:brown
Hair:black
Height:6'0
Body Type: Muscular but skinny
Skin Color: Tan (Kind of rasict I cant be brown but whatever)
God Parent: Amphitrite
Mortal Parent: Blake Grace
Country of Origin: USA
Pets: Sea snake named Greg
Talents: Sports and Acting
Weapon**: A celestial bronze Sword named Twilight
Personality: Nice, and funny will make jokes at the wrong times. But will always lightin the mood. loyal if your friend will stick by you forever until death.
Flaws: Never gives up
Powers(must relate to god parent; optional): Water, can use it whenever and for how long he wants. He can also talk to sea creatures but can only sometimes talk to horses
Life Before Camp*: Amazing. I can't belive how great my life was. I was rich, filthy rich and a child actor.  Also went on many crusies with new step brother/nephew. He had the life of a king.
RP Example*:I can't belive im here camp half blood. I cant wait to see my dorm. I hope they have it, me and my step brother/Nephew have god parents that arent that popular. Just then some of the Ares and the Hermes kids pushed me into the lake. They must have not knowed who my godly parent was. I drenched them with water, then another one, a camp star clarisse came, i tried to drench her but it was like someone was holding the water back. As I looked up I saw Percy Jackson holding the water back, and Chiron.
"Big House, NOW" said Chiron
Freshmen:
1- Algebra
2- Language Arts
3- Ancient Greek
4- Water training
Lunch
5- Biology
6- P.E.
7- Battle Practice (M,W,F)/ Archery (T,R)


Last edited by Jake Grace on 1/8/2015, 1:19 am; edited 6 times in total (Reason for editing : An Admin asked me to)
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Re: Jake Grace- Son of Amphitrite

Post by Kendall on 12/17/2014, 8:55 pm

Zeus is not allowed unless you get a Big Three slot; please change the god parent.

Skin Color can be things like pale, beige, tanned, etc.

Eagles aren't allowed -- no migratory bird is in fact.

Is his sword Celestial bronze?

Life Before Camp should be at least 5 sentences long.

Is your character related to Thalia? This wouldn't be allowed.
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Re: Jake Grace- Son of Amphitrite

Post by Kendall on 12/20/2014, 11:47 am

When you edit, don't email me; just post in this topic that you've edited. It's a lot easier on the approvers.

If you want your character to be "brown-skinned" (not sure I'd put it that way but whatever) then that's fine. I was listing examples for you in my previous post, as denoted by the "etc."

No to the sea snake.

Amphitrite is not a Roman goddess, so your character could only get celestial bronze weapons.

Add more to the personality. Make it at least two lines long.

Add two more flaws.

Powers:
- What can he do with the water? What is the most powerful thing?
- For how long could he use the water each time? How many times a day at most can he use his powers?

Life Before Camp:
- So, add more here. Who was his stepbrother and stepmom? When did his dad remarry? What was Jake's life like before his dad got married?
- How did he get to camp?

RP Example isn't exactly the way I asked you to make it. Add some action into it, some dialogue. Not just thoughts.
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Re: Jake Grace- Son of Amphitrite

Post by Kendall on 1/10/2015, 7:59 pm

[Last warning: You need to post in this topic that you've edited so we know you've done so. If you do not do this your form will not be checked.]

Again, I was listing a few choices for skin color descriptions; you are not limited to them. I was not being racist; remove that part from the skin color section; if you have a problem with what I said all you need to do is post here contesting it and I'd clear it up.

And again, you can't have a sea snake. Change the pet or remove it altogether.

Add more to the personality.

You still need to do the following things:

Add two more flaws.

Powers 1/10 Edit: You must give proper limits for his powers. We won't let you get away with "whenever and as much as he wants.":
- What can he do with the water? What is the most powerful thing?
- For how long could he use the water each time? How many times a day at most can he use his powers?

Life Before Camp:
- So, add more here. Who was his stepbrother and stepmom? When did his dad remarry? What was Jake's life like before his dad got married?
- How did he get to camp?

For RP Example, I should mention that you're not allowed to control any canon character, including Chiron, Percy, and Clarisse, while role-playing. Please edit that.
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Re: Jake Grace- Son of Amphitrite

Post by Jake Grace on 1/14/2015, 9:14 pm

Name: Jake Grace
Age: 15
Gender:Male
Eyes:brown
Hair:black
Height:6'0
Body Type: Muscular but skinny
Skin Color: Tan
God Parent: Amphitrite
Mortal Parent: Blake Grace
Country of Origin: USA
Pets: Serpent named Greg
Talents: Sports and Acting
Weapon**: A celestial bronze Sword named Twilight
Personality: Nice, and funny will make jokes at the wrong times. But will always lightin the mood. loyal if your friend will stick by you forever until death. Brave will go up against anybody for any reason and won't back down.
Flaws: Never gives up and
Powers(must relate to god parent; optional): Water, can use it whenever and for 12 hours a day. He can also talk to sea creatures but can only sometimes talk to horses
Life Before Camp*: Amazing. I can't belive how great my life was. I was rich, filthy rich and a child actor. Also went on many crusies with new step brother/nephew ty. He had the life of a king. My stepmom dawn wilson a big time actress and my dad a big time actor we got many roles.
RP Example*:I can't belive im here camp half blood. I cant wait to see my dorm. I hope they have it, me and my step brother/Nephew have god parents that arent that popular. Just then some of the Ares and the Hermes kids pushed me into the lake. They must have not knowed who my godly parent was. I drenched them with water, then another one, a camp star came, i tried to drench her but it was like someone was holding the water back. As I looked up I saw someone holding the water back, and the camp leader cenutar.
"Big House, NOW" he said
Freshmen:
1- Algebra
2- Language Arts
3- Ancient Greek
4- Water training
Lunch
5- Biology
6- P.E.
7- Battle Practice (M,W,F)/ Archery (T,R)
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Re: Jake Grace- Son of Amphitrite

Post by Jake Grace on 1/14/2015, 9:15 pm

I just have to say if i did it wrong please dont get mad a me
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Re: Jake Grace- Son of Amphitrite

Post by Kendall on 1/14/2015, 9:39 pm

Next time, just edit your first post with the alterations I asked for -- and then post that you've edited. Don't repost the form. (Also, don't double-post.)

What species of serpent does he have?

You're missing two flaws. Add two.

Powers:
- Are you saying he can use it for 12 hours a day total? That would not be acceptable. Please divide up his powers in number of times per day he can use them, how long at most he can use them each time, and cool-down period lengths between usages.
- You also still need to tell me the most powerful thing he can do with water, and whatever else he can do with it.
- How far away could he be from a water source at most in order to use his powers?

LBC:
- How did your character get to camp?
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