Emerald Son of Palaemon

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Emerald Son of Palaemon

Post by Atromite on 4/1/2017, 1:09 pm

Name: Emerald
Age: 15
Gender: Male
Eyes: Light Blue
Hair: Blonde
Height: 5' 9"
Body Type: Skinny
Skin Color: Tan
God Parent: Palaemon
Mortal Parent: Amada Hart
Country of Origin: United States of America
Pets: Horse named Iron his horse is currently at camp half blood.
Talents: Fighting
Skills: Horse Riding,Sword Fighting.
Weapon: Two Swords that are made out of celestial gold.
Personality: He's great to hang out with but likes to fight in combat a lot,and he likes to make his friends laugh, his friends are almost always the combat type and the smart type, Along with that he's not very good at social Skills. Through he's loving and naturally protective of his friends and family.
Flaws: Annoying,Takes jokes seriously.


Abilities: Can talk to sharks, and can breath underwater.
Powers: Can Walk on water but drains energy and the cool down is 5 hours.
Life Before CHB: Emerald studied Sharks and Underwater creatures,his mom grabbed him and told him "Get in the water!" But he said "Its saltwater!" when he went in he could breath underwater in saltwater and was shocked..1 day after a man came to get him and drove him  to camp half-blood, He brought his horse and couple days later.
RP Example: "Ah!" I said running to the water trying to escape the satyr "Get away from mee!" I yelled diving deeper in to the saltwater
Any notes about your characters: Sharks don't attack him.


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Re: Emerald Son of Palaemon

Post by Morgan Landry on 4/3/2017, 6:40 am

Hi!

- Please reduce his height. 6'9" for 15 is a bit too much.
- Is his horse at camp?
- Celestial bronze is the standard metal for Greek demigods.
- Please develop his personality a bit more.
- The last two flaws aren't really flaws. I think what you're trying to say is that he is violent and not very outgoing?
- You can make his underwater breathing an ability if you wish.
- No turning into shark. Shapeshifting is not allowed. He could summon sharks maybe?
- You need 5 sentences for life before camp.

Rest looks good :)
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Re: Emerald Son of Palaemon

Post by Atromite on 4/9/2017, 10:51 am

Okay I edited and in adding more flaws rn


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Re: Emerald Son of Palaemon

Post by Atromite on 4/9/2017, 10:52 am

And yes his horse is at camp half blood
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Re: Emerald Son of Palaemon

Post by Kendall on 4/14/2017, 1:15 am

His weapon should be Celestial bronze; there is no such thing as Celestial gold.

Add another flaw.

Powers:
- ... Are you sure you want him to walk on water? It's only very minor control of water, which I'd guess would be acceptable, but you could do a bit more with the shark thing -- for example summoning them to aid him, like Morgan suggested.
- When you provide power limits, we ask that you write them in this format: he can use the power for x number of posts, but must wait y number of posts before using it again.

LBC:
- Describe his life more. What was it like before camp? Did he have many friends? Get along well with his mom? Do well in school?
- ... Has he never gone to the ocean/some saltwater body of water before? How old was he when he first found out he could breathe underwater -- did this just take some time to manifest in him?
- How did this "man" (I'm assuming satyr, as your RP Example says) know where to find him?

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