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Post by Virena on 7/6/2017, 3:22 pm

Name: Virena Solate
Age: 13
Gender: Female
Eyes: Blue
Hair: Long, blonde
Height: 5'4"
Body Type: strong from archery and working out
Skin Color: pale-ish
God Parent: Apollo
Mortal Parent: Kate Solate
Country of Origin: Norway
Pets: Dog
Talents: sports and crafts
Weapon**:  celestial bronze bow and arrows
Personality: stubborn, fun to be around, sassy, sarcastic, mostly outgoing
Flaws: Can be very rude. Can be too strong. Violent. Hates most people. Otherwise is nice
Life Before Camp*: Did good in beginning of school, but didn't have many friends. Virena was Socially awkward. she Wrote a popular book. Hated life and people. But she's starting to change.
RP Example*: As I stepped foot into the Apollo cabin, My jaw dropped. I was so excited to meet fellow children of the sun god. There weren't as many as I thought, though.  But the cabin itself is what got my attention. along with this guy named Will.


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Re: WIP Character

Post by Mason on 7/6/2017, 3:28 pm

Hey, Virenna, I know this is a WIP, but just to point out a few things.

Life Before Camp needs to be a minimum of 5 sentences. Some points to talk about, if you need ideas, would be her childhood, how she did in school, what her home life was like, how she got to camp, etc.

RP Example is like writing a short 5 sentence story with your character. For example, "I walked into the mess hall, hungry as could be. I immediately went to get food."

Are you confused on powers/abilities or just haven't put them in?
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Re: WIP Character

Post by Virena on 7/6/2017, 3:32 pm

no im not confused i'm just not putting them in. thanks for help
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Post by Mason on 7/6/2017, 3:33 pm

Yep, just comment "Edited" or "Finished" when you're ready to be checked (:
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Re: WIP Character

Post by Virena on 7/6/2017, 3:39 pm

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Post by Mason on 7/6/2017, 3:45 pm

Are her bow and arrows celestial bronze?

Add a few more talents.

Add at least two more personality flaws.

Try to make your Life Before Camp complete sentences, even if they're short. Like, for example, "She did good in school. However, she was socially awkward. She wrote a book."
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Re: WIP Character

Post by Virena on 7/6/2017, 3:47 pm

ugh this is so hard for someone as lazy as me XP
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Post by Mason on 7/6/2017, 3:50 pm

Lol, I apologize. I don't think we ask for much, though- I'm giving you guidelines for bare minimum requirements. Tell me when you edited (:
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Re: WIP Character

Post by Virena on 7/6/2017, 3:54 pm

we good yet? if not, i'll edit AGAIN tomorrow
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Re: WIP Character

Post by Mason on 7/6/2017, 4:02 pm

Much better, but still with a couple of flaws. Good job. (:

-Flirting with guys isn't much of a flaw, unless you mean overly flirty. You still need a 3rd flaw, though.

-In her history, add a part about how she got to camp.

-Also, how popular was this book, exactly?

-You still need 1 or 2 more personality traits.
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Post by Virena on 7/6/2017, 4:04 pm

whew almost done. im done with this today though. you seem cool so i might talk to you
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Post by Mason on 7/6/2017, 4:07 pm

Alright, tell me when you edit and me or another approver will check it. And thanks, I guess, you're cool too. (:
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Re: WIP Character

Post by The Cheshire Cat on 7/6/2017, 4:46 pm

Weapon
-Silver is only for Hunters of Artemis so please change this to Celestial Bronze.

Personality
-You need a bit more personality, at least 5 traits.

Flaws
-You need at least one physical flaw.

Life Before Camp
-You need to add more to the LBC. How was their growing up? Were their powers ever a problem? How did they get to camp? Did monsters ever attack? ect.
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Re: WIP Character

Post by Virena on 7/16/2017, 4:01 pm

edited?
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Post by Mason on 7/16/2017, 5:05 pm

Add some more detail to her Life Before Camp, like how she got to camp, or if monsters attacked.
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