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BlackHawk Senior Member

 Number of posts: 1964 Age: 12 Registration date: 2011-07-25
 | Subject: military story 8/17/2011, 7:47 pm | |
| Chapter 1: The Supposed Friend
I walk in to a building cautiously,look around gun in hand and my knife where i could reach it .I walk upstairs and hear a slight ticking and jump onto the ground.The ceiling explodes and I try to protect my self as much as possible.the ceiling completely covers me.I push the rubble off and stand up.I look around and see all the rubble over this family's house luckily they were out for vacation.I walk out of the house and spot a some what suspicious person and hide behind some crates.I can barely hear what he's saying he was talking on the phone.He said "we have to attack soon" i slowly walk up behind me gun put away and knife in hand.He replied to the guy on the other line "yes sir but they're all around here we need to do it" i put my knife at his throat and say "who's all around here".He puts his hands up and then violently elbows me in the ribs and i fell back bringing him with me knife still at his throat.I roll out and get on top of him pulling out my pistol and pointing it straight at his head.He says "hey hey calm down im not a threat" i spit at the ground and cock my pistol "who was that you were talking to" i snarled.He says "My boss" he says sarcastically i put my finger on the trigger "now do you want to tell me who you work for" i ask calmly "i work for an agency that kills spies" i get off of him and help him up.
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Agent LastWish Moderator

 Number of posts: 24285 Age: 15 Registration date: 2010-07-13
 | Subject: Re: military story 8/17/2011, 8:55 pm | |
| I really really liked it and I hope you continue! But it would be easier to read if it were double spaced. But I really liked it! ________________ Luna(Blind) Noonian Soong Kat Crystaline Amber(Southern Accent) Xaali Taliso(African Accent) Xana(Genetically Altered) Josefina(Italian Accent) Westley(Austrailian Accent) Jim Harvy(British accent) Demetrius(German Accent) Patience Loader(Irish Accent)(167) Lysander(Deaf) Clytemnestra(Russian Accent) Liam Spencer Randi "Borg Queen" Thirteen
"You know what that means! Wait for it!" Cannon booms. "BOOOM!!! HUNGER GAMES!!"
GATTACA
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BlackHawk Senior Member

 Number of posts: 1964 Age: 12 Registration date: 2011-07-25
 | Subject: Re: military story 8/17/2011, 9:18 pm | |
| Chapter 2: The Enemy Attacks
He took my hand and got up we walked around looking for anyone suspicous. We walked into an abandoned house and i went upstairs and he stayed on the ground floor i walked into a bedroom and saw a dead body and told john to come here. He came into the bedroom and walked over to the corpse and said "do you think we should bury him properly " i shake my head and walk to another room. He continues his search downstairs. He finished his search downstairs and came up to help me. It us a good 3 hours to search through everything and by the time we were finished we were kind of tired. We walked back to where we set up temporary camp till we cleared this area. I told him about what's happened before we met he told me about his family all that he had to leave behind when he became a spy hunter. We just walked into camp when he finished. We heard about 20 guns cock and i told them he was on our side but they wouldn't put their guns down until the general told them to. The General walked forward and we saluted "who's this " he asked calmly " He is on our side sir he is a spy hunter and for all we know is one of us could be a spy sir". That's when it happened about 6 or 7 of our "men" started shooting and all of our real men killed them within seconds.
To Be Continued............... (hey sorry this one was shorter i was really tired and i wanted to get it done so i could go to bed so the next one will be longer maybe)
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Scollywogs Role Playing Legend

 Number of posts: 10780 Age: 13 Registration date: 2010-01-13
 | Subject: Re: military story 8/18/2011, 4:41 pm | |
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BlackHawk Senior Member

 Number of posts: 1964 Age: 12 Registration date: 2011-07-25
 | Subject: Re: military story 8/18/2011, 5:02 pm | |
| Chapter 3 : The Trek To Tehran
We were shocked by what just happened and we all agreed we needed to get out of there. We packed up camp and started walking towards Iran. We reached the border and saw all the guards there we paid our tolls and walked straight into Iran. We set up camp just outside the city limits and plan what we are going to do. We decided to look for any other camps. So about 5 groups went out to search for camps. Only one group came back with what looked liked a army camp but they didnt know. So the next day we went out to see this camp. we walked to it and found that it was filled with every sort of military personal from privates to 3 star generals. We all greeted ourselves and told them about what happened back in Afghanistan. They would nod every few seconds and when we finished they sat in silence for a couple of minutes and a general stepped forward and asked "how many spies were there" "about ten or twenty sir" i said then stepped back. He rubbed his chin and thought and then said "thats peculiar very peculiar" "yes it is sir" one of the Sergeants said from behind him. We talked for about an hour and then agreed it would be best if we returned to our camp for the night pack up in the morning and start for the trek over to their camp in Tehran when we woke up. We were walking back to camp when suddenly a shot was fired and missed us but we fell to the ground and it was dark out so we put on our night vision goggles and looked around for who might have fired. We searched and searched and finally someone spotted someone, the general told him to shot it so he shot it and we then saw it fall. We walked over to the body and found out it was a terroist that must have followed us from Afghanistan. The general kicked it over so his face was looking into the stars and someone asked "what should we do with the body sir" he said "leave him to the wild" and with that we walked back to camp. We woke up to the general yelling at us to hurry up because we had a long trip to Tehran. We headed out for Tehran and made it there safely.
To Be Continued.........
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Mother Inferior Experienced Member

 Number of posts: 5261 Age: 13 Registration date: 2010-01-08
 | Subject: Re: military story 8/18/2011, 5:24 pm | |
| The next chapter should be,
BANG BANG OWWW I GOT SHOT NUUUUUUUU *dead*
Not really.
How about There's a Spy Among us?
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Simon the Fighter Loyal Member

 Number of posts: 2645 Age: 13 Registration date: 2011-01-03
 | Subject: Re: military story 8/18/2011, 6:03 pm | |
| How about 'The Trust Runs Low' |
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BlackHawk Senior Member

 Number of posts: 1964 Age: 12 Registration date: 2011-07-25
 | Subject: Re: military story 8/18/2011, 9:05 pm | |
| sorry guys i dont think ill have time to make another chapter before i depart i'll make one a soon as i get back |
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Pepper Potts Experienced Member

 Number of posts: 5476 Age: 12 Registration date: 2011-04-14
 | Subject: Re: military story 8/18/2011, 9:45 pm | |
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BlackHawk Senior Member

 Number of posts: 1964 Age: 12 Registration date: 2011-07-25
 | Subject: Re: military story 11/19/2011, 7:59 pm | |
| Chapter 4: Captured
We walk into the camp and we hear about 20 guns cock. We raise our hands slowly and put down our weapons. The general stepped forward "where are you from soldiers" he says loudly. i reply "Just outside Afghanistan, Sir" he glares at us for about a minute and then tells his men to lower their weapons. He paces looking at us every minute or so. He finally lets us stay and then he tells us about what has happened the last week or so. He says that there hasnt been anything going on in Tehran but that doesnt mean he's right. We spend all day watching Tehran and then at dusk we switch out shifts and we go to sleep. We wake up and grab our guns and packs. We leave to invade Tehran, well at least that was our plan but i feared we wouldnt succeed. We walked into Tehran and immediately we all feel something wrong we look around and all the locals were staring at us. We walked into the center of the town and asked a local where the courthouse was, he pointed towards a huge building near the eastern end of town. We walked straight into the courthouse and demanded we speak with the mayor at once. The mayor came out and we said we were taking over this town as our own for protection. He pleaded for mercy and we finally agreed that the locals could still live here safely. We slept in a nearby hotel for a week or so. We went on as if the town was our home and the locals treated us nicely. One night i woke up to the locals swarming our hotel rooms i yelled and all the other men immediately started to raise the alarm and after a while of struggling the locals over whelmed us and we were bound blind folded and carried to dark room. We struggled and struggled but couldnt get free. The locals lock us up in their jail cells but luckily the general called reinforcements before they captured us. We spent about 2 weeks in the jail cells untill the reinforcements came they captured the town and banned the locals from the town. We all called the local troops to the town as a refuge from the spies and terroists. We stayed there until we had to leave to go back over seas for the time being.
To Be Continued.... |
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pilot Role Playing Legend

 Number of posts: 10301 Age: 16 Registration date: 2010-10-15
 | Subject: Re: military story 11/19/2011, 8:10 pm | |
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BlackHawk Senior Member

 Number of posts: 1964 Age: 12 Registration date: 2011-07-25
 | Subject: Re: military story 11/19/2011, 8:11 pm | |
| yea it wasnt one of my better chapters im hoping the next one will be better |
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Stuart35 Chatbox Moderator

 Number of posts: 1844 Age: 14 Registration date: 2010-01-12
 | Subject: Re: military story 11/19/2011, 9:01 pm | |
| Cool so far ________________ John Trester/Son of Apollo/14/Legs Disabled/Lazy Song by Bruno Mars David Seletan/Son of Hermes/15/British Accent/You're Gonna Go Far, Kid by The Offspring Lauren Fengura/Daughter of Athena/15/ The Middle by Jimmy Eat WorldCarth Thert/Son of Geb/17/Egyptian Accent/Seven Nation Army by The White Stripes Josh Haht/Son of Hypnos/16Character Pictures| Spoiler: | | |  |
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BlackHawk Senior Member

 Number of posts: 1964 Age: 12 Registration date: 2011-07-25
 | Subject: Re: military story 4/2/2012, 5:39 pm | |
| ok guys so i want to ask you all something, do you guys want me to continue this story at all? |
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Demetri Loyal Member

 Number of posts: 2509 Age: 13 Registration date: 2011-08-04
 | Subject: Re: military story 4/3/2012, 11:56 pm | |
| pretty good. are u a military brat, too? |
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