Violette Krystall

Number of posts: 21 Age: 17 Registration date: 2011-12-23

I also edited the talents so it's not everything

Subject: Re: Violette Krystall 12/24/2011, 12:58 am

Double-posting helps you none.

1 mile is still way too long.

Her talents are quite ridiculous and unrealistic. 10 Nobel peace prizes? Winning the Olympics at the age of 2? Come on.

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Jazmine/Hades
Veshtov/Hecate
Marcus/Apollo
Ellie/Aceso
Toph/Geb
Zayden/Anubis
Antony/Minerva(3rd)
Kelli/Chione
Jacqueline/Hecate
Carter/unclaimed
Gabriel/Adikia

Charrie sketches:

Number of posts: 21 Age: 17 Registration date: 2011-12-23

Edited that and some other things.

Subject: Re: Violette Krystall 12/24/2011, 1:05 am

Her eyes cannot be "gamma ray colored" since Gamma rays are not visible to the naked eye, therefore, not having "color," so to speak.

Her hair cannot be infinitely long, nor laced with gemstones.

She can't be 40ft tall.... seriously.

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Jazmine/Hades
Veshtov/Hecate
Marcus/Apollo
Ellie/Aceso
Toph/Geb
Zayden/Anubis
Antony/Minerva(3rd)
Kelli/Chione
Jacqueline/Hecate
Carter/unclaimed
Gabriel/Adikia

Charrie sketches:

Number of posts: 21 Age: 17 Registration date: 2011-12-23

Edited once more.

Subject: Re: Violette Krystall 12/24/2011, 1:08 am

Her hair just can't glow... sorry.

No one is 4 inches tall.

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Jazmine/Hades
Veshtov/Hecate
Marcus/Apollo
Ellie/Aceso
Toph/Geb
Zayden/Anubis
Antony/Minerva(3rd)
Kelli/Chione
Jacqueline/Hecate
Carter/unclaimed
Gabriel/Adikia

Charrie sketches:

Number of posts: 21 Age: 17 Registration date: 2011-12-23

Dang...it's one of her flaws though. Also edited the hair thing

Subject: Re: Violette Krystall 12/24/2011, 1:12 am

Again, no human/demigod is 4 inches tall. Try and be a little more realistic...

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Jazmine/Hades
Veshtov/Hecate
Marcus/Apollo
Ellie/Aceso
Toph/Geb
Zayden/Anubis
Antony/Minerva(3rd)
Kelli/Chione
Jacqueline/Hecate
Carter/unclaimed
Gabriel/Adikia

Charrie sketches:

Number of posts: 21 Age: 17 Registration date: 2011-12-23

Edited again

Subject: Re: Violette Krystall 12/24/2011, 1:16 am

Supermodels may be super skinny, but they aren't normally "fit and healthy" as you described.

Life before CHB needs to be at least 5 sentences long.
Also, the rp example has nothing to do with your character...

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Jazmine/Hades
Veshtov/Hecate
Marcus/Apollo
Ellie/Aceso
Toph/Geb
Zayden/Anubis
Antony/Minerva(3rd)
Kelli/Chione
Jacqueline/Hecate
Carter/unclaimed
Gabriel/Adikia

Charrie sketches:

Number of posts: 21 Age: 17 Registration date: 2011-12-23

So you read it? I feel happy!

Subject: Re: Violette Krystall 12/24/2011, 1:20 am

-_- Okay. Well. I have to go now. Someone else can help you later. Try and look through your form. Make sure everything is as realistic as possible.

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Jazmine/Hades
Veshtov/Hecate
Marcus/Apollo
Ellie/Aceso
Toph/Geb
Zayden/Anubis
Antony/Minerva(3rd)
Kelli/Chione
Jacqueline/Hecate
Carter/unclaimed
Gabriel/Adikia

Charrie sketches:

Number of posts: 21 Age: 17 Registration date: 2011-12-23

Okay. Edited again.
Now that I made my character less unacceptable, you could use the original thing as how not to make a character.

Subject: Re: Violette Krystall 12/24/2011, 12:12 pm

No dragons.

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Kendall, Daughter of Ares
Rosalie, Daughter of Aphrodite
Claire, Daughter of Hecate
Archer, Son of Hecate
Stella, Daughter of Ouranos
Meagan, Daughter of Gaea
Aidan, Daughter of Pyriphlegethon
Tempest, Daughter of Aeolus
Nelly, Daughter of Apollo
Benji, Daughter of Kuk
Deja, Daughter of Odyne
Mason, Son of Hermes
Waldo, Son of Hermes
Terra, Daughter of Tiki
Lucy, Daughter of Somnus; First Cohort
Dorian, Legacy of Mefitis; Third Cohort

You power-play, I god-mod. (Switching "god-mod" with "power-play" works too.)