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Re: Violette Krystall

Post by Defaulty on 12/24/2011, 12:56 am

I also edited the talents so it's not everything

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Re: Violette Krystall

Post by Chuck on 12/24/2011, 12:58 am

Double-posting helps you none.

1 mile is still way too long.

Her talents are quite ridiculous and unrealistic. 10 Nobel peace prizes? Winning the Olympics at the age of 2? Come on.
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Post by Defaulty on 12/24/2011, 1:02 am

Edited that and some other things.

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Re: Violette Krystall

Post by Chuck on 12/24/2011, 1:05 am

Her eyes cannot be "gamma ray colored" since Gamma rays are not visible to the naked eye, therefore, not having "color," so to speak.

Her hair cannot be infinitely long, nor laced with gemstones.

She can't be 40ft tall.... seriously.
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Post by Defaulty on 12/24/2011, 1:07 am

Edited once more.

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Re: Violette Krystall

Post by Chuck on 12/24/2011, 1:08 am

Her hair just can't glow... sorry.

No one is 4 inches tall.
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Re: Violette Krystall

Post by Defaulty on 12/24/2011, 1:10 am

Dang...it's one of her flaws though. Also edited the hair thing

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Re: Violette Krystall

Post by Chuck on 12/24/2011, 1:12 am

Again, no human/demigod is 4 inches tall. Try and be a little more realistic...
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Post by Defaulty on 12/24/2011, 1:14 am

Edited again

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Re: Violette Krystall

Post by Chuck on 12/24/2011, 1:16 am

Supermodels may be super skinny, but they aren't normally "fit and healthy" as you described.

Life before CHB needs to be at least 5 sentences long.
Also, the rp example has nothing to do with your character...
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Post by Defaulty on 12/24/2011, 1:17 am

So you read it? I feel happy!

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Re: Violette Krystall

Post by Chuck on 12/24/2011, 1:20 am

-_- Okay. Well. I have to go now. Someone else can help you later. Try and look through your form. Make sure everything is as realistic as possible.
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Post by Defaulty on 12/24/2011, 1:26 am

Okay. Edited again.
Now that I made my character less unacceptable, you could use the original thing as how not to make a character.

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Re: Violette Krystall

Post by Kendall on 12/24/2011, 12:12 pm

No dragons.
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