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Wind Eon

 Number of posts: 6 Age: 15 Registration date: 2012-01-28
 | Subject: Nathans Life 1/28/2012, 9:08 pm | |
| Name: Nathan Kane Age: 15 Gender: Male Eyes: Grey Hair: Black with grey streak Height: 5'9" Body Type: lean Skin Color: normal God Parent: Boreas Mortal Parent: Lana Kane Country of Origin: United States of America Pets: Guine pig named Brownie Talents: Able to summon cold windstorms Skills: close combat fighting Weapon: Celestial bronze dagger with a blue gem in a black hilt Flaws: sometimes dose risky things without thinking first, he gets annoyed if someone (or sonething) ticks him off, and he has has trouble working in groups Powers: Cold windstorm that is 15 feet wide and long/wide that lasts 5 minutes and the winds are 15 miles per hour and he can only use it if someone he cares for is in danger. He can make mini wind tornados in his hand when hes bored though  Life Before CHB: Never knowing his father, Nathan lived in Maryland like any other kid. He wasn't a bully or one of the kids that's famouse for getting in trouble. He was an A-B student., but he never thought he would belonged in a group. It was just another summer with a normal summer hurricane. It didnt seem all that bad to him but his mother always acted strange during these storms. Nathan overheard his mother saying "Im sorry, i just cant let my son know about this" their was a strong wind" "No, I just cant" All of a sudden the storm was gone. (Note, I am not breaking the rules by doing this, I just found a creative way of introducing Nathan to you Admins out their  )
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|  | | Kendall Administrator

 Number of posts: 33975 Age: 2010 Registration date: 2008-09-13
 | Subject: Re: Nathans Life 1/28/2012, 9:09 pm | |
| (You're not breaking the rules at all... why would you ever think that.)
You can't have a silver dagger; we only allow Celestial bronze.
Add two more flaws.
How long do his windstorms last, and how much of an area can they cover? How many times a day can he use this power? ________________ Kendall, Daughter of Ares Rosalie, Daughter of Aphrodite Claire, Daughter of Hecate Archer, Son of Hecate Stella, Daughter of Ouranos Meagan, Daughter of Gaea Aidan, Daughter of Pyriphlegethon Tempest, Daughter of Aeolus Nelly, Daughter of Apollo Benji, Daughter of Kuk Deja, Daughter of Odyne Mason, Son of Hermes Waldo, Son of Hermes Terra, Daughter of Tiki Lucy, Daughter of Somnus; First Cohort Dorian, Legacy of Mefitis; Third Cohort
You power-play, I god-mod. (Switching "god-mod" with "power-play" works too.)
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|  | | Wind Eon

 Number of posts: 6 Age: 15 Registration date: 2012-01-28
 | Subject: I fixed it 1/28/2012, 9:28 pm | |
| I fixed it, could you look at it again? |
|  | | Kendall Administrator

 Number of posts: 33975 Age: 2010 Registration date: 2008-09-13
 | Subject: Re: Nathans Life 1/28/2012, 9:29 pm | |
| He needs to have a limit to number of times he can do it and how long, usually in minutes. It also needs to be a certain size. How strong is the wind in the storm?
ALSO: You forgot RP Example. It's like telling a story from your character's point of view. You need 5 sentences of that. ________________ Kendall, Daughter of Ares Rosalie, Daughter of Aphrodite Claire, Daughter of Hecate Archer, Son of Hecate Stella, Daughter of Ouranos Meagan, Daughter of Gaea Aidan, Daughter of Pyriphlegethon Tempest, Daughter of Aeolus Nelly, Daughter of Apollo Benji, Daughter of Kuk Deja, Daughter of Odyne Mason, Son of Hermes Waldo, Son of Hermes Terra, Daughter of Tiki Lucy, Daughter of Somnus; First Cohort Dorian, Legacy of Mefitis; Third Cohort
You power-play, I god-mod. (Switching "god-mod" with "power-play" works too.)
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|  | | Wind Eon

 Number of posts: 6 Age: 15 Registration date: 2012-01-28
 | Subject: Re: Nathans Life 1/28/2012, 9:41 pm | |
| | Kendall wrote: | | You need 5 sentences of that. |
I didnt see that but ok, is it in third or first person? |
|  | | Kendall Administrator

 Number of posts: 33975 Age: 2010 Registration date: 2008-09-13
 | Subject: Re: Nathans Life 1/28/2012, 9:48 pm | |
| Either one is okay. ________________ Kendall, Daughter of Ares Rosalie, Daughter of Aphrodite Claire, Daughter of Hecate Archer, Son of Hecate Stella, Daughter of Ouranos Meagan, Daughter of Gaea Aidan, Daughter of Pyriphlegethon Tempest, Daughter of Aeolus Nelly, Daughter of Apollo Benji, Daughter of Kuk Deja, Daughter of Odyne Mason, Son of Hermes Waldo, Son of Hermes Terra, Daughter of Tiki Lucy, Daughter of Somnus; First Cohort Dorian, Legacy of Mefitis; Third Cohort
You power-play, I god-mod. (Switching "god-mod" with "power-play" works too.)
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|  | | Wind Eon

 Number of posts: 6 Age: 15 Registration date: 2012-01-28
 | Subject: Re: Nathans Life 1/28/2012, 9:58 pm | |
| This might be stupid to ask but could you count the 2nd part of my "Life before CHB"? |
|  | | Kendall Administrator

 Number of posts: 33975 Age: 2010 Registration date: 2008-09-13
 | Subject: Re: Nathans Life 1/28/2012, 10:00 pm | |
| Unfortunately no, if you mean to count it as your RP Example. ________________ Kendall, Daughter of Ares Rosalie, Daughter of Aphrodite Claire, Daughter of Hecate Archer, Son of Hecate Stella, Daughter of Ouranos Meagan, Daughter of Gaea Aidan, Daughter of Pyriphlegethon Tempest, Daughter of Aeolus Nelly, Daughter of Apollo Benji, Daughter of Kuk Deja, Daughter of Odyne Mason, Son of Hermes Waldo, Son of Hermes Terra, Daughter of Tiki Lucy, Daughter of Somnus; First Cohort Dorian, Legacy of Mefitis; Third Cohort
You power-play, I god-mod. (Switching "god-mod" with "power-play" works too.)
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|  | | Wind Eon

 Number of posts: 6 Age: 15 Registration date: 2012-01-28
 | Subject: Re: Nathans Life 1/28/2012, 10:06 pm | |
| | Kendall wrote: | | Unfortunately no, if you mean to count it as your RP Example. |
All right I understand know I guess that will be my example. Do I have to add more to it or is that ok? Writing RP's isn't one of my strongest points but I like reading them |
|  | | Kendall Administrator

 Number of posts: 33975 Age: 2010 Registration date: 2008-09-13
 | Subject: Re: Nathans Life 1/28/2012, 10:11 pm | |
| Put a separate section in your form for it and write things from your character's point of view. The last part of your Life Before CHB wouldn't really count as an RP Example. ________________ Kendall, Daughter of Ares Rosalie, Daughter of Aphrodite Claire, Daughter of Hecate Archer, Son of Hecate Stella, Daughter of Ouranos Meagan, Daughter of Gaea Aidan, Daughter of Pyriphlegethon Tempest, Daughter of Aeolus Nelly, Daughter of Apollo Benji, Daughter of Kuk Deja, Daughter of Odyne Mason, Son of Hermes Waldo, Son of Hermes Terra, Daughter of Tiki Lucy, Daughter of Somnus; First Cohort Dorian, Legacy of Mefitis; Third Cohort
You power-play, I god-mod. (Switching "god-mod" with "power-play" works too.)
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