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Alren James the Sorcerer not so Supreme

Post by MrUnderwood on 5/23/2016, 3:46 pm

Name: Alren James
Gender: Male
Mortal Parent: Unknown
God Parent: Hecate
Date of Birth: April 17 2004 / 11 years old
Place of Birth: Oakland, California
Hometown/Last Residence: Las Vegas in a hotel/casino called "The Purple Pony Casino"
Race/ethnicity: Spanish and American
Accent: slightly Spanish
Skin Tone: pale
Eye Color: purple contacts (normally blue)
Hair Color: Light blonde
Hair Length: medium sleaked back with gel
Height: 4' 10"
Weight: 70 pounds
Body Type: thin no bulk what so ever
Appearance: creepy shifty wears a cloak over a black camp shirt and jeans (he dyed his shirt black)
Weapon: Cb staff
Armor: has a set of CB armor but refuses to wear it
Pet(s): none
Skills/Talents: reading, learning, magic comes natural to him
Flaws: snarky, rebellious, antisocial, Untrustworthy, gloomy
Strengths: self trusting - slow to trust new people - clever
Weaknesses: Pretty bad at singing and can't cook
Likes: the dark and ravens
Dislikes: sports
Fears: being all alone
Personality: He is very shifty. He keeps to himself alot. He is usually sticking his nose in a book or scroll. He is never smiling his most positive facial expression is a grin. He doesn't talk much.
Abilities: none
Powers:  2 different spells
Y'nri Er - 5 bird from his surrounding surround him attacking nearby enemies - 1 post chanting/10 post cooldown/lasts 3 posts
Xlu Grenth - sap some strength (about as much as 3 cups of coffee) from a living creature/human by pushing then pulling his hand towards a target - 2 posts chanting/6 post cooldown

and can manipulate the mist, the biggest thing he can manipulate is something within a 8x8x8 feet cube and can hold for 4 posts max and has a max cool down of 6 posts.

Social Status: loner
Summer or Year Rounder: year rounder he doesn't have anywhere to go
Years at Camp: 2
Life Before Camp: He was left alone. The owner of the hotel took him to an orphanage, but he ran away back to the hotel looking for his parents.  He met many people, one man took him in, it wasn't a man though, i was only 9. It was a satyr. I told him I didn't have a family. He decided to take me to Camp Half-blood after he learned I was a halfblood. The journey was long and dangerous. Multiple hellhounds and a manticore attacked us. We fought them one at a time. I say we but it was mainly the satyr.

Role-playing Example: The beast leaped. I thought the hellhound would kill me right there, but my spell worked. The ravens surrounded me and i was safe. Just then two more leaped, they were pushed away too. I started chanting and the hounds ran for the hills. "Thanks" said the new halfblood. "No problem, I was new once too" I replied. I walked him to the big house. Chiron galloped out and took him inside. "Exciting second day" I said
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Re: Alren James the Sorcerer not so Supreme

Post by Kendall on 5/23/2016, 7:06 pm

Why doesn't he have a mortal parent? Is he an orphan or was he abandoned at a young age? (If yes to either, you should mention that in his LBC.)

Add some more to his appearance. 

Flaws:
- How did he burn/scar his hands?
- How are purple eyes a flaw?

Add a lot more to his personality -- if you want a drachma reward, this should be at least 5 sentences.

Powers:
- Where do the ravens come from? Just the surrounding area?
- For the second power, how does he sap strength? 
- How far could he be at most from a thing to do it?
- How much energy can he take?
- I'm gonna say no to the third power.

LBC:
- He was left alone by his mortal parent? When? He'd probably be tossed into an orphanage. 
- Why was he meeting so many people? Was he travelling around frequently?
- Where did he meet the satyr?
- How old was he when he met the satyr?
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Post by MrUnderwood on 5/24/2016, 10:30 am

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Re: Alren James the Sorcerer not so Supreme

Post by Morgan Landry on 5/27/2016, 2:17 pm

Hi there!

- He does need an armour
- Injuries and scars don't count as flaws, please replace them.
- Weaknesses are things he is not good at.
- How many birds does the first spell affect?
- Why would an empousa attack him? Empousai are servants of Hecate, his mother.

Rest looks good to me :)
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Re: Alren James the Sorcerer not so Supreme

Post by MrUnderwood on 5/31/2016, 7:34 am

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Re: Alren James the Sorcerer not so Supreme

Post by Kendall on 5/31/2016, 9:04 pm

Add more to the personality.

Powers:
- By strength, do you actually mean energy? Because that's what coffee gives you.
- Measure the amount by something else; coffee affects people differently.
- What happens to the strength/energy when he takes it away? Is it just gone?
- How can people resist losing energy to him? (At least 2 ways)
- How far can he be at most from a person to use this on them?

LBC:
- How old was he when he ran away from the orphanage?
- What was his life at the orphanage like?
- Why did no one turn him in to the police when he met them? People would be very concerned to see a 9 year old running around by himself.
- How did the satyr learn he was a demigod?
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Post by MrUnderwood on 8/23/2016, 11:34 am

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