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Post by azoreo on 6/9/2016, 9:03 pm

Name: Briar McKinley
Gender: Female
Mortal Parent: Dave McKinley
God Parent: Aphrodite
Date of Birth: August 17, 2002
Place of Birth: South Carolina
Hometown/Last Residence: Connecticut
Race: American
ethnicity: America
Accent: American
Skin Tone: White
Eye Color:  Hazel
Hair Color: light brown
Hair Length:  about elbow length
Height: 5'3 ft.
Weight: 105 lbs.
Body Type: Hourglass shape
Appearance: long beautiful silky brown Hair hanging over her shoulders or in a high bun. Big Hazel eyes. Sun dress or tank and shorts. always has lip gloss on (not much of a lipstick fan). She does have a scar (as said in flaws) near her right ear, she does her best to hid it, but its still very visible after makeup is put on.  She always wears the heart necklace her father gave her when she was little.
Weapon: a Celestial Bronze dagger and keeps 2 quarter staves on her back which has a celestial bronze spike but the rest of it is oak
Armor: Metal breast plate
Pet(s): n/a
Skills/Talents: good Artist in terms of painting and sketching, really smart (mostly in math and science) but didn't like to show it
Flaws: thinks she is prettier then everyone else. Worry wart. Stressed a lot (sometimes over the littlest things) She can get cocky at times. Shy when you first meet her but she will warm up to you. She has a scar by her ear that she got when she got dared to climb a tree, but she fell.
Strengths: optimistic, creative, Quick thinker, fast
Weaknesses: cooking, Learning other languages
Likes: sugar, wolves, cats, birds, her Pinkalicious lip stick
Dislikes: carrots, Llamas,
Fears: Llamas (there was an incident at a petting zoo one time...)
Personality: Briar is funny, charming, and gives back. She is Beautiful given her mom is Aphrodite. Briar has a bit of a sweet tooth and loves candy (especially candy corn). She very popular at her school, and don't get me wrong, she loves it, but feels her friends hang out with her because of the popularity. It may be surprising, but she does go to a gym almost everyday.
Abilities: N/A
Powers: Can be fully dressed and ready with makeup and everything in a minute. it takes 1 posts and must wait 2 posts before doing it again. (2 times per topic)
Social Status: Extroverted. very popular but doesn't hang out with any girls except for Andi out side of school.
Summer or Year Rounder: Summer
Years at Camp: 2

Life Before Camp: Briar's Dad was almost never off the phone. He was a very busy man and had a very important job. Briar didn't even know what her dad did, there was no time to ask and she just didn't care. Her dads home office was always locked but Briar never thought much about it. Briar didn't have the best child hood. Her mom left and she never had the experience most kids should have. For instance, she has never been to Disneyland/world, she has never driven a go cart, She has never even had a birthday party. All because her dad is so busy with his job. Briar is broken inside because she thinks she has no one who loves her and will spend time with her. That's why she wears so much makeup. To cover her broken heart. Even though Briar is popular at her school and has many friends, she only one really close friend, Andi. Her life may not have been perfect, but it was livable. That was before she suddenly got a new Latin teacher and then Their school got attacked by a weird demon thing and she found out about a totally different world...

Role-playing Example: "Guess what!!!!" Andi yells as she runs into the bathroom of Briar's apartment. Andi was Briars very best friend from school. Briar looks up annoyed. Her makeup was messed up due to Andi's rude barge in. "What" said Briar "Cant you see I'm doing my makeup" "Josh (hot football player) just broke up with Sydney (most popular girl at school)!!" Andi said still yelling excitedly.  Briar looks at her slowly, "I swear if your joking with me-"  "No! No joke at all!" Andi says. Then the two girls squeal excitedly and continue to gossip. Life was good, well until she turned 13 and found out her teacher was a satyr who brought her to a weird camp...
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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by Morgan Landry on 6/10/2016, 5:17 am

Hey!

- Ethnicity is like, Asian, Native American, Hispanic, etc.
- Body type is hourglass shape, pear shape, rectangle, etc
- For the quartstaves, stick with celestial bronze for the spikes. The wood can be oak, beech, something along those lines.
- She needs an armour for capture the flag and battles
- When you say she's a good artist what are you referring to? Painting, drawing, sculpting...?
- How is being smart a flaw?
- Strengths are positive personality traits eg patience, humorous, optimistic, etc.
- Weaknesses are things she's bad at. If she's not good at swimming for example, list it there.
- Please develop on the personality.
- How many posts does the power take, how many times can she do it in a topic, how many posts cool down?
- How did she get to camp?

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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by azoreo on 6/10/2016, 5:44 pm

updated!
(could you please tell me what you mean by posts in powers?)
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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by Kendall on 6/14/2016, 11:16 pm

For powers, our limits are defined by number of posts -- for example, Bob can control fire for x number of posts and must wait y number of posts to rest before using it again. (Replace x and y for numbers; general rule of thumb is that cooldown should be equal to or greater than the duration. You can also say she can do this z number of times per topic instead of "times per day," but cooldown and duration are required.)

You need to define a race for her; ethnicity is based on cultural factors, while race is about general genetic characteristics a population may share. For example, Bob's race would be Asian (specifically Chinese, Vietnamese, etc) but his ethnicity would be American if he was raised/lives here. [I hope I explained that properly. Google might help a bit.]

Add more to her appearance and personality.

For her abilities section, please put "N/A" or "none" if she doesn't have any.

For social status, this isn't really the same as relationship status -- this is more of how she's generally seen by people based on how she acts. For example, is she very extroverted and cheerful, thus having a lot of friends (a social butterfly)? Is she a loner who didn't really have many friends? Smart kid who may or may not be a nerd? 

LBC:
- ... How does she not know what her father does as a job? Did he intentionally hide it from her? Did she never try to listen in on what he was saying on the phone, or never even glanced at any paperwork or diplomas/certificates or whatever he had?
- Outside of her home life, how was her social life? Her school life?
- How did she get to camp, and at what age?
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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by azoreo on 6/27/2016, 5:34 pm

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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by azoreo on 7/13/2016, 12:16 am

um... updated
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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by azoreo on 7/25/2016, 1:29 pm

hello!?
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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by Kendall on 7/26/2016, 6:41 pm

Apologies for the delay; I've been rather busy lately so I haven't had as much time to log onto the site. [Next time, please PM an admin or approver for a faster response; I'm not sure what everyone's schedules are like, but activity has been rather slow in general as of late.]

Race/Ethnicity:
- For her race, you'll need something more definite than "American" -- that's not a race, it's an ethnicity. Race would be like she's Asian (specifically Chinese, Mongolian, Vietnamese, etc), Native American (state specific tribes if possible), Hispanic, etc.

You still need much more for her appearance and personality, especially if you want a drachma reward for the form. (To get the reward, 5 sentences for personality is required, as well as 5 flaws including one physical distinction.)

Powers:
- I feel like, since the power only takes a minute, that you don't need to say it takes 3 posts to use? A minute could easily pass in one post, so all you'd need is a post cooldown and a limit to the number of times she can do this per topic.

LBC:
- Please write how she got to camp in this section.
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Post by azoreo on 7/27/2016, 2:46 pm

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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by Belle on 8/12/2016, 1:49 pm

Hello! Sorry it has been so long since an approver or admin has checked your form Azoreo!

I would just like to say you need at least one physical flaw. So either her nose is too big, crooked teeth, loss of a limb, scar that can be seen that alters the day to day appearance, that sort of thing.

Also did you want the drachma reward or no? Because if you did you still need two more sentences for your appearance. Personality technically needs four more sentences as you have one long run on sentence as your personality. You could find a way to chop it up to get your remaining four sentences though.
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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by azoreo on 8/14/2016, 4:44 pm

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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by Belle on 8/14/2016, 5:02 pm

You need one more sentence on appearance and you should be good.

However I will let you know, that currently your form is under the minimum word count requirement for obtaining drachmas, so you'd need to add in more details. Right now you have roughly about 676 words and you need at least 1000 words to get the reward.
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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by azoreo on 8/14/2016, 7:31 pm

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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by azoreo on 11/13/2016, 4:35 pm

so is this approved or....?
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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by azoreo on 12/11/2016, 10:38 pm

ive been on this website for about a year now, and I get people are busy, but is it normal to have to have to wait 5 months to get a reply?
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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by Kendall on 12/17/2016, 1:41 am

I'm extremely sorry for the wait; everyone's been busy with school and the site hasn't been very active because of that.

LBC:
- You note that her teacher was a satyr in her RP Example -- please add this detail to her LBC and elaborate more on it. Why did he suddenly reveal himself to her? How long had he been around?

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Re: New Aphrodite kid

Post by azoreo on 12/17/2016, 4:45 pm

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Post by Kendall on 12/26/2016, 7:42 pm

LBC:
- What "weird demon thing"?
- Describe the whole situation more. How did she get attacked? How did she escape, and what did her new Latin teacher do/what was he?
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